Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of timeDiscuss both sides and give your opinion

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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time
Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Some people think that teaching children music and painting at school is important while others say that arts-based subjects are wasting students' time. Although art subjects improve children's emotions, this essay believes that it is better when children spend their time studying science-related subjects.

On the one hand, art subjects enhance students' emotions about many aspects of life. this is to say that children are taught to evaluate every piece of music or drawing better. this leads to a deeper understanding of school children in the meanings conveyed in songs and paintings. children can then relate what they have learned to real-life aspects. For example, my fifth-grade friends who focused on piano classes always have deep thoughts about hardships in life to share. However, this essay believes that art subjects will not do wonders to the future of children if they cannot compete with others in the job market.

On the other hand, science-related subjects equip children with practical skills to meet every company's needs in the future. this is because employers mostly look for people who are skillful at computer and math-solving rather than those who can sing and draw. For instance, students who master math, physics and computer skills can easily secure any jobs while those who focused on art subjects can barely find a position in any company and even in their own field. this essay believes that science subjects provide essential skills to children and they worth more time compared to arts-based subjects.

In conclusion, while music and painting lessons help children have more depth in their thinking, these lessons are wastefully consuming children's time and subjects such as math and physics are more worthwhile.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1476.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29032258065 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55402941456 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559139784946 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4103214889 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.538461538 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4615384615 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266368972195 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101193138786 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0939629700957 0.0667982634062 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177136076558 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888636482508 0.056905535591 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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