Some people think that art is the essential subject for the children at the school. while other think it is waste of time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

Some argue that studying art in school should be given importance, whereas others say it shall not be considered as a curriculum,as it is a waste of time. However according to me, I think art carries its own importance and that it should not be neglected, rather given equal importance in a child's school curriculum.

One of the most important thing to consider about art is that, it can teach children to express themselves better by drawing their feelings, as it is difficult for them to express by words. Art can help a child to be creative and may help in enhancing their imagination too. At Oxford university, they studied behavior in children aged between 5-10 years, they concluded that when a child is given a pencil and a paper, they have a huge tendency to come out with some really amazing and innovative idea to draw something out of their imagination. This lead to an increase in their brain activity which can help them to develop their mental strength.

Other than just drawing, Dance and Music can also be considered as a form of art. Dance helps in developing hand eye coordination and helps to relax your mind. Music can also help to bring peace of mind and can help one to focus in their work positively.

Although in today's competitive world, people want their children to focus more on other subjects like science and math which they think, would help them in their future. Subject's like science and math should be given more importance as they do outweigh when compared to art.

In conclusion, as it is not necessary that every child would want to be a scientist or an engineer, some might want to consider to become a painter, actor or a dancer. So, I think that art should be considered as a subject in a school curriculum, which can help a child to have better imagination power.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, really, so, whereas, i think, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67289719626 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61812754874 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507788161994 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4625899177 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.384615385 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6923076923 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174792625504 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683271253943 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536679825882 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105414454356 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046123259017 0.056905535591 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 50.2224549098 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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