Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars.To what extend do you agree?

Essay topics:

Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars.

To what extend do you agree?

An increasing concern for many people around the world is that the punishment issues for the particular prisoners. Some part of people from society supporting the idea about punishment style. In this essay will discussing about this topic.

In recent days, many volunteers from human rights establishment want to change some certain law relevant for this people. Against to rest of the world, they believe the basic individual be able to learn of how could be becoming a good person. Firstly, i partially agree with the idea that could be improve the community. Thus, the government should work with the scientists such as socialist, doctors. With this professional people could be provide to rescue this people from their terrible life.

Secondly, in view of my opinion, each person should be deserve the second change in their life. Vital questions are why this people are prisoner, what happened in their life? Their life could be horrible and tough and finally this things could be bad effects on this people. However, by second change this some people become a special volunteers. They be able to learn assist some tough things for disable persons or cleaning the street for the children. With this new arrangement the individuals can be adapt to rules in life.In this way, they can be pay their punishment during doing goodness within freedom. Thus, through to this volunteers government be able to save money from certain departments. In conclusion, maybe not for all prisoner maybe for special ones might be appropriate for this second life.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'discuss'
Suggestion: discuss
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
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...ional people could be provide to rescue this people from their terrible life. ...
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Message: Did you mean 'deserved'?
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... in their life. Vital questions are why this people are prisoner, what happened in t...
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...could be horrible and tough and finally this things could be bad effects on this peo...
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...dividuals can be adapt to rules in life.In this way, they can be pay their punishm...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'volunteers'' or 'volunteer's'?
Suggestion: volunteers'; volunteer's
...s within freedom. Thus, through to this volunteers government be able to save money from c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1304.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09375 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52598797194 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 378.9 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.5624204833 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.5 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198421695018 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747461044103 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0301200456947 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133669812416 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601843902963 0.056905535591 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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