Some people think competitive sports, such as football, are valuable because they can gather people with different ages and cultures together. Some think competitive sports can cause problems because people are from different groups and countries. Discuss

Few people think that competitive sports such as soccer are incredible as it gathers different cultured and different ages people together. However, others think that competitive sports can cause issues as it invites people from different groups and different part of the world. In my opinion, competitive sports are the means to understand people from different parts of the world and their culture.

On one hand, in this contemporary world, some people think that competitive games like football gather people across the world. Furthermore, Competitive games are playing a vital role in bringing various kinds of people from different countries and understand their culture. One of the most famous sports, like football, has huge fans across the globe and there is a predominant scope for knowing their culture and learn good things from their culture. For instance, traditional dance shows before the tournament begins depicts the culture and tradition of that country.

On the other hand, games like soccer bring spectators from different countries that might bring problems like a quarrel between different country people. There are chances that, over-emotional fans might lose their patience; if their favorite team loses the match and they might cause nuisance; which might bring problems in the stadium

In conclusion, games like soccer, which has huge fans across the world, might bring the problems, like quarrel but on the positive side of such games gathers a huge crowd and allows people to communicate people and understand each other in a better way.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1327.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 248.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35080645161 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54976164951 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 392.4 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.5182769105 49.4020404114 195% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.444444444 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5555555556 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6666666667 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388316087125 0.244688304435 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.203989578349 0.084324248473 242% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15519660062 0.0667982634062 232% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237333660702 0.151304729494 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.177251445171 0.056905535591 311% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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