Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
While a number of people argue that children should start academic education as soon as possible, some others think the initiation of this training should be at 7 years of age. In the forthcoming paragraphs I will elaborate both of these statements.
By starting formal education from younger ages, children would have more job experience in the future. Almost all big companies, which have a well-paid salary, require at least 5 years of experience from their applicants. If children were able to go to school at earlier ages, they would go to university and graduate sooner and start their primary job. After a few years in comparison to other peers, they have more experience and can easily be qualified for a better job opportunity. In addition, children can focus on learning as soon as possible rather than spending hours on doing some useless activities such as video games. Nowadays any game devices are provided for children and while they spend hours on playing with them without bringing any merits to their lives, they are harming children’s eyes and violent games are having detrimental influence on their mental health. Instead of that, children can learn basic principles of education and use these years to improve their ability to learn abstract science.
On the other hand, proponents argue that in the earlier ages, children’s mind is developing the coordination with the other parts of brain and body which helps them to evolve a lot of abilities such as precepting music notes and playing it. If their academic learning commences in earlier ages, they may lose the ability to learn some practical things such as playing musical instruments. Furthermore, beginning this kind of education needs some prerequisites such as learning how to communicate with other children and teachers and that is why children should go to the kindergarten between 5 to 7 years of age. However, by devoting some extra-curricular classes and starting the kindergarten in earlier ages these problems may almost be addressed.
In conclusion, because of its advantages I believe that formal schooling should be started as soon as possible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1004, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to abstract'
Suggestion: to abstract
...years to improve their ability to learn abstract science. On the other hand, proponen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, while, at least, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16905444126 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82015972527 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527220630372 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4817681221 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.857142857 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9285714286 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294006032114 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105723584797 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101438150011 0.0667982634062 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212286602833 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102752864048 0.056905535591 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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