Some people think that the government should be responsible for crime prevention while others believe that it is the responsibility of the individuals to protect themselves.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Crime commitment protection is the responsibility of government based on some people's belief but on the other hand some consider that it is a personal responsibility. In my opinion, I think that both sides are partially true and it needs to discuss both of them concurrently, besides, I think first of all people have to protect themselves from committing the crime and then if they are not successful , it would be governments' turn to control the criminals.
On the one hand, people are responsible for their actions, that means, each person is taught about right and wrong behavior ,so, they are expected to act in right way, in another word, they are expected to have self-control of doing unpleasant or harmful actions especially when their act or behavior might hurt other people. Totally, a conscience person never commits the crime and as a result of that, the crime rate would reduce, if people improve their self-control behavior or listen to their conscience.
On the other hand, some people believe that government has to prevent the crime commitment. It is partially true because a powerful government could run out the law or increase the security in the community by training more police officers. Sometimes government neglected some of the rules because of criminal connections with authorities and the lack of strength in running out of the law increase the crime rates. What's more lack of security, make it possible to committing the crime without fear of arresting or punishment.
Finally, in my point of view, it is essential to teach the younger generation how to have self-control in order to create individual protection of committing a crime and the government should increase their monitoring on punishments and security.
In conclusion, we have two groups of people. One consider that the cause of reduction the crime rate could depend on authority controls and another group think that self-control is one of the best ways of preventing a crime commitment.
Comments
More compound or complex
More compound or complex sentences/clauses wanted.
Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ponsibility of government based on some peoples belief but on the other hand some consi...
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Line 1, column 402, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rime and then if they are not successful , it would be governments turn to control...
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Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...is taught about right and wrong behavior ,so, they are expected to act in right wa...
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Line 5, column 273, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...fficers. Sometimes government neglected some of the rules because of criminal connections w...
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Line 5, column 417, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...ut of the law increase the crime rates. Whats more lack of security, make it possible...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thout fear of arresting or punishment. Finally, in my point of view, it is esse...
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'as to', 'i think', 'in conclusion', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'in my opinion', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.243697478992 0.247107183377 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.156862745098 0.155533422707 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0644257703081 0.0946595960268 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0448179271709 0.0501214627716 89% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0588235294118 0.0437548338989 134% => OK
Prepositions: 0.131652661064 0.122226691241 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0336134453782 0.0403226058552 83% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.93144801976 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.03081232493 0.0326793684256 94% => OK
Particles: 0.00280112044818 0.00163938923432 171% => OK
Determiners: 0.109243697479 0.0861772015684 127% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0168067226891 0.021408717616 79% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00560224089636 0.011925033212 47% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1993.0 1933.35771543 103% => OK
No of words: 328.0 316.048096192 104% => OK
Chars per words: 6.0762195122 6.12580529183 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20517956788 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.335365853659 0.374742101984 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.283536585366 0.28420135186 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.22256097561 0.203846283523 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.15243902439 0.137316102897 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93144801976 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.037074148 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509146341463 0.56093040696 91% => OK
Word variations: 52.5588978896 60.7387585426 87% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0891783567 68% => OK
Sentence length: 29.8181818182 20.7743622355 144% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.0107430803 49.517814964 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 181.181818182 127.492653851 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8181818182 20.7743622355 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.27272727273 0.814263465372 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.99599198397 150% => OK
Readability: 58.1718403548 49.1944974215 118% => OK
Elegance: 1.56989247312 1.69124875643 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.523486582256 0.332605444948 157% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.165383790104 0.102741220458 161% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0720802947553 0.0668466124924 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.690438928458 0.534860350844 129% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.175021299618 0.148594505496 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.252406386033 0.134430193775 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0978365259236 0.0742795772207 132% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.311273938211 0.324371583561 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0519883868727 0.0638462369009 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338451531261 0.228012699653 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107966663938 0.058150111329 186% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.68436873747 46% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 5.90881763527 68% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.5751503006 194% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.4468937876 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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