Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody,
regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to
retire and receive a pension at an earlier age.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?
For most people, the retirement age should be lower than sixty-five. There is a strong belief amongst the population about the unfairness of having the same retirement age for everybody regardless of the occupation performed. Many of them believe that certain types of jobs should benefit from early retirement.
In my opinion, I agree that sixty-five years old is not an acceptable age to retire. By the age of sixty-five, most people, are suffering from several health issues and other affections. This age needs to be modified so that way people could enjoy better the benefits of working their whole life. Furthermore, I believe that different jobs should have different ages for retirement. For example, workers of mining tend to live abroad, most of the time work for more than 45 hours a week. Not being able to rest properly, and missing the important dates with their families like Christmas, Thanksgiving, New Year's eve, among others. I firmly believe that many workers in difficult conditions, long days and short nights must benefit from early retirement.
To sum up, the retirement age needs to be lower that way, people who work for almost forty years might be able to enjoy the benefits while they still can, while they stay healthy. I also believe that several types of jobs must have a different set of ages for retirement. Given the nature of the job performed throughout the years. It is not a completely fair system but, at least it's the first step to a system that benefits everyone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 382, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... a completely fair system but, at least its the first step to a system that benefit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, still, while, at least, for example, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1255.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90234375 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60464286011 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57421875 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4512978892 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6428571429 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286177993041 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971866816493 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691808165218 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210008209564 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391209253668 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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