Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There is no doubt that everyone deserves a retirement. Few people believe that the minimum age criteria for retirement should not only be at predefined number. They think that some employees deserve to get pension and retire irrespective of their age or occupation. In this essay, I agree to the give statement and in this essay, I will explain my view with supporting examples.
To start with, majority of people in a corporate companies take retirement at the older age. This is because, humans have the tendency to follow and continue the traditional rules. For instance, in an IT company, all employees get retirement at 65 years old and receive the pension to relax the rest of the life. This culture can be seen significantly in the Asian countries. However, few people who are veterans serve their duty for 30 years of span and get early age retirement.
Why do the other civilians not deserve early retirement? The answer is yes, it is because the average worker might need a retirement either due to some medical reason or some need for money. For instance, some workers in USA can ask for pension earlier by taking retirement. This should be practised as a normal procedure. Moreover, the only thing needs to be done is the thorough background check for their condition.
To conclude, despite of standard retiring age criteria, every worker should get a chance based on their genuine reason if necessary. Furthermore, the veterans, civilians, deserves a benefit from early retired life irrespective of their occupations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'company'?
Suggestion: company
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Suggestion: an; IT
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Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
...aditional rules. For instance, in an IT company, all employees get retirement at 65 yea...
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...he Asian countries. However, few people who are veterans serve their duty for 30 years ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, for instance, no doubt, in my view, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1286.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0234375 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79351229414 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59375 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.2350876628 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.375 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359986967323 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109701323702 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824734966121 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210058129252 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406429216979 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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