Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

People have different views about the way of achieving our intellectual ability. Though it is argued that people innate with this ability, I believe that they can advance their talent through the gaining knowledge.

Not all people become same level of expert in different skills. They can exploit expertise which they inherited by born. A recent TED TALK shows that different people brain reaction varied for a particular subject, and the intensity of reaction made them proficient for the specific area. This ability is unique for everyone which they receive from their gene. For example a professional pianist’s fingers could respond with a piano, but they will not produce same reaction on computer keyboard. In this way, individual achievements are varied in a society.
However, Despite people can have an inherited skill, I would argue that they could advance their aptitude through education. It helps people to broad their knowledge. They get opportunity to learn about society, economy, technology and arts which develop their individual perspective on these subjects irrespective of their inborn quality. Hence, this will encourage people to involve various tasks to improve themselves. A BBC documentary shows that the educational curriculum of Finland is oriented on multi task learning which aim is learner of science can also achieve the painting skill by persevere learning and vice-versa. Therefore, learning is an opening for us to become intellectual in multitude areas, and develop our intelligence.
In conclusion, while people would born with some exceptional capability, in my view learning is

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Average: 5.5 (9 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48605577689 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83828682994 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601593625498 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.401640853 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7333333333 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106104517986 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410484849817 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356487402209 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.082034725776 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034882101764 0.056905535591 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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