Some people think that it is better to be self employed while others argue that working for a company is better Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Essay topics:

Some people think that it is better to be self-employed while others argue that working for a company is better. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Although there are some people who believe that self-employment is the best option for them, others take the view that working as employees is better. In my opinion, it is better for them to start own businesses.

On one side of the argument, there are people who would argue that serving for employers can create a better life. This is because working for an organization offers a steady income and less risk of business failure. This risk free income allows them to plan their future ahead and have a good control on the life. In addition, workers are generally less stressful than owners in a business. The main reason for this is that unlike the owners, they only need to take responsibility on their duties. As a result, this benefits their mental well-being and leads them to live longer.

Despite the above arguments, I am of the position that being self-employed could benefit people and their countries. Indeed, one reason for believing this is that flexible work hours could be achieved by self-employment and this offers an obvious advantage for people who cannot fit into 8-hour work routine. Furthermore, if their companies get profits, they do not require to share them with the others. Therefore, owning a business is financially more profitable. Additionally, business development of a country is highly influenced by small and medium enterprises. If everyone starts to work on their own businesses, the number of these enterprises will be increased so it will support the growth of the business in the country.

In conclusion, while both views are commonly held in society, I believe that self-employment can offer the best results for people. Given this situation, it is recommended that people should try to find a way to start their own businesses in order to support their own financial stability and development of business society.

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Average: 8.7 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 375, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'sharing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: sharing
...panies get profits, they do not require to share them with the others. Therefore, owning...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1558.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05844155844 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87507653876 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561688311688 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8912584409 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.375 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314236063735 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999931997905 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0948235401627 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215089307787 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103041390882 0.056905535591 181% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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