Some people think it is more important for government to spend public money on promoting healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of the people who are already ill. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?
It is obvious that government has the most power to spend money on health projects. It is necessary to give people awareness or change they lifestyle to prevent illness. This helps the population to have better physics and mind and the result is that we could have healthy society and people who could be more productive.
the research shows that spending money to stop illness is some how like an investment that you can pick its efficiency up later. That means healthy society, will thrive more in every field. The way that people live, eat, practice and think has the direct impact on their productivity.
Spending money just on treatment of illness people, couldn't help much. Because that needs a huge amount of money that just helps people to survive not to change their culture to not be ill again. So focus only on the disease can't solve the problem that people would involve in future.
Pew research center shows that four in ten of the US population could be dominant of cancer because shifting their lifestyle. This shows that investing in promoting healthy lifestyle is not only useful to prevent illness, but also helps ill people spending their treatment sooner.
However data shows that it's more important for government to spend money on promoting healthy lifestyle but treatment of people who are already ill is also important. The best way is to allocate the enormous budget for health that preventing illness has more share. Since the budget that spend on healthy society culture come back after a few years.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1273.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89615384615 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34170764071 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526923076923 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 385.2 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3173043935 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9285714286 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5714285714 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.85714285714 7.06120827912 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.443710696299 0.244688304435 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149132227899 0.084324248473 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116041037104 0.0667982634062 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245328794349 0.151304729494 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0879185271549 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.