Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers, others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
It is common that people give money to teenager as a gift. Some of them believe this is the best one, however, I can hardly agree with them. The following essay will discuss in both views.
Admittedly, it is not easy to understand the young kid’s wish to get a gift by an adult’s view. To give the money might be a better option instead of buying something to children. For instance, most of the children would like to buy a video game as a birthday gift, but not many parents knew their favour. By contrast, receiving a gift without any surprise might be upset teenagers’s mind.
Nevertheless, the above argument is one-sided, since it fails to consider the long-term risk that would entail. For one thing, to give money as their reward regularly would pose a threat to young people’s mental health. Teenagers will put their priority value related with that how much they can be paid. Without any benefit exchange, they will not contribute themselves to the society. That is the reason why some kids became selfish after they grew up. Moreover, money came first would lead to teenagers lack of empathy. For example, some teenagers would ignore the people or animals might need a help without any rewarding.
For another, giving money as a best gift would put a wrong concept regarding the value of the best to the teenagers. The best gift should not only provide a financial benefit but also spiritual advantage. Particularly to join the reading club, participating music concept or travelling around. As the bonus of these activites, teenagers will open their vision, becoming well educated and have good manner with others. As a best gift, the above activities would be beneficial to the teenagers whey they are growing up.
In conclusion, while it is true that money can be one of the options as a gift to teenagers if someone did not familiar with them, it is not a sensible reason to think this is the best gift for young kids, since teenager need a better value added by spiritually.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, regarding, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, for one thing, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81896551724 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6447446 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537356321839 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8712899269 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.85 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267662536974 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821230139656 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756536898939 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160841767331 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496953001867 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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