Some people think that the only way to judge someone’s success in business is by the amount of money they make. Is this a true indicator of the success of a business and in what other ways could success in a business be measured?

Essay topics:

Some people think that the only way to judge someone’s success in business is by the amount of money they make. Is this a true indicator of the success of a business and in what other ways could success in a business be measured?

A few people reckon that the quantum of money earned in a business is the ultimate factor to determines a personal achievement. Whereas, there are other parts which are highly conducive to assess victory in the company. In this essay, I shall explain the reasons for the former viewpoint, along with the other contributing methods to estimate the success rate.

On the one hand, there are myriad reasons to claim the money as a deciding factor for success in a business man's life. First and foremost, money has the highest visibility, while it is directly connected with the status of a person because it showed via the lifestyle of an individual. For instance, a businessman who possesses a huge revenue would definitely upgrade his living style like a house, an expensive car, and other real-estate properties and so on. Consequently, people could found that the business person made the biggest turnover in his firms where it is purely visible.

On the contrary, while it is true that the profit gained through the business could state a man's victory, this could not be considered as the exact symbol of achievement. Firstly, a good conglomerate could be recognised by the reputation it earns through the proper administrations like, providing a regular salary to staffs, maintaining high-end infrastructure, tie-up with overseas traders, and finally the revenue it generates. Since, all these aspects are interlinked with one another, failing to satisfy one condition could end up in a massive pitfall for the private firm, hence, the reliability is also paramount.

In conclusion, the quantum of money earned by a person in his business might depict his supremacy, but still, there are other factors like standards and honour would be a relevant factor to ascertain a person's complete victory.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r to determines a personal achievement. Whereas, there are other parts which are highly...
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Line 13, column 201, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...would be a relevant factor to ascertain a persons complete victory.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, so, still, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, it is true, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18027210884 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88115918589 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578231292517 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.4017470125 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.454545455 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7272727273 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0909090909 7.06120827912 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215836793037 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840726949111 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616868076654 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130481471426 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031972639097 0.056905535591 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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