Some people think that schools are merely turning children into good citizens and workers rather than benefitting them as individuals To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

Some people think that schools are merely turning children into good citizens and workers, rather than benefitting them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It has been argued by some individuals that instead of benefitting students at individual level, schools are making them good member of the society and professional. I,however, disagree with this view as I believe that along with attributes of a good citizen and worker, pupils reap personal benefits from schools as well.

Schools are equipping students with the fundamental skills as well as inculcate a spirit of discipline in them in order to make them as responsible members of the society. Providing them traits such as language acquisition, computer skills, knowledge, learners can develop themselves as well as can secure appropriate employment. Also, discipline, which is incorporated among pupils in the school time, plays a pivotal role to nourish them as an ideal citizen. Wearing school uniforms, respect others, inter-mingle with other students, and respect everyone are to name just a few characteristics which children develop during school days to be a good citizen. Hence, school act as a foundation stone in a child's life.

I think extra curricular activities held at schools assist students in their personal lives. Schools provide training for activities like art and craft, music, sports along with curriculum and with these activities students can identify their talent and pursue their career in respected fields. Well-known celebrities, artists, musicians and sportsmen have hone their skills in the school time and then they took their talent to the next level. Virat Kohli, a prominent cricketer of Indian team, is a good paradigm of this who explored his talent in inter-school tournament then worked hard and now he is a shinning star of Indian cricket association. Therefore, it is apparent that schools are not only converting students to professionals or good citizens but also helping them to know their own interest and pursue it as a career.

In conclusion, it could be reiterated that besides the advantages for future career prospects and society, schools are also giving pupils chance to grow and nurture their talent.

Votes
Average: 9.2 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31804281346 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87247626657 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596330275229 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.4302008016 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.769230769 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1538461538 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178675809408 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070131324097 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424426469893 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112135891435 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620415655847 0.056905535591 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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