Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food and drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics: Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food and drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health. Do you agree or disagree?

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There are a number of people suggest that supermarkets should not be allowed to sell food and other kind of beverages that are proven to be bad for for human's health. So i totally agree with this statement, as i will argue this point in details as following;

Nowadays, we believe that traders do not concentrate on people's health, but they are only focus on strartegies how to heap up money, and this is what they care about. However, their priority is the money, as they look for consumers's health as a secondary condition.

In addition, there is a recent reports came out from the ministry of food and health, that market sell products such as; some of canned fruits, and canned beans, it has approved that it should not be sold to consumers, as it contains on high chemical conservatives, which it will lead to destroy human's health, as a result, it may cause a dangerous disease in stomach which it is cancer ailment. Although the ministry warn them from selling it to people, but they still display on shelves. They become careless to human health, because they focus on money. Recently, it was notified that few supermarkets were caught selling these products, as a consequence, it was closed because they violated rules of health equality.

In adition, health food controller is working strictly against those shops to ensure food quality, hence, any shops violate the rule, they will be exposed to pay fine and closing the concerned supermarket. Furthermore, the rule is applied on beverages as well. It should be there a test done in the lab for new items before distributing it to retailers. In case, items do not match human's consumption standards, it should be damaged accordingly. In recent researches showed that some people were poisoned due to eating corned beef, after it was checked, they had found that it manufactured and canned by dogs meat instead of cows meat. They added that they found raw tunas and it contained on high percentage of bacteria , as it was not cooked well.

To conclude, food quality controller should take a strict actions against retailers who sell unregistered items, As it should undergo tests and analysis into depth before selling it to consumers.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, well, in addition, kind of, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1832.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88533333333 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6583401391 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557333333333 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 2.10420841683 475% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.3630324865 49.4020404114 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.857142857 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7857142857 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21428571429 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307959139006 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102803187647 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110378912342 0.0667982634062 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178814140631 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0973563554284 0.056905535591 171% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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