Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss.
People’s opinions seem to differ on whether spending money lavishly on celebrations and special occasions is a positive trend or a mere wastage of money. While some seem to agree with the argument that it is necessary for the society, I believe that such unmindful spending should rather be avoided.
To begin with, people have myriad reasons to argue that spending loads of money on weddings and other special occasions is quite unnecessary. Firstly, they feel that instead of spending huge amounts of money on any celebration, it is better to save it and later invest it in better ways. For instance, instead of spending lots of money on a child’s first birthday party in a five-star hotel, it is better to save it for his higher education or a couple can use this money to buy a home for them. Another reason why some people avoid spending large proportions of money on wedding and birthday parties is that they want to avoid wastage of food as well as that of money. The meal menus are generally very large in grand celebrations, and once the party is over, often a lot of food has to be thrown in garbage. Therefore, it does not make any sense to spend money on holding lavish celebrations.
On the other hand, there are people who have reasons to argue that why it is imperative to have grand celebrations. Firstly, sometimes spending on special occasions like birthdays, anniversaries and housewarming become a social obligation for many people and they get in to the societal pressure spending their hard-earned money. Secondly, people feel that celebrations serve a way of enjoying life with their family and friends, and they feel that such celebrations are part of their customs and traditions. While this may be true to a certain extent, in my opinion, there is no need to spend large sum of money on celebrations. For example, a birthday party held at home can be as enjoyable as the one held at a five star hotel and yet it costs much less.
To conclude, I feel that unmindful spending on any occasion can be avoided. Instead that money should be saved or used in a better way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, as well as that, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71002710027 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68253535235 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474254742547 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.0 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1923861603 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.866666667 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6 7.06120827912 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280001205229 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095881659353 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528437147405 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163098349125 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0858215548173 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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