Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

I am convinced, human life expectancy has increased considerably in last few decades. Therefore, many of us think that age limit of retirement should also be adjusted accordingly. I do not completely agree with this perception as I believe it depends much on the type of work. Plenty of jobs need the employee to be physically strong where as others do not. So the decision of extending working timeline should not be taken based on age limit only.

Extension of retirement age would definitely help people to stay independent longer. Now-a-days, we some how fail to take care of the older people in the family as we tend to focus more on our own life. It won't do any harm if people keep earning in their old ages. Rather, by doing so apart from being self sufficient they can support their family if necessary. For example, my grand father was capable of taking of his entire family even after his sixty's as he kept earning from his own business. That no only allowed him to stay independent but also helped to avoid some perplexing situation related to family expense. Therefore, earning for longer period will make things much easier.

During the old age, most of the people might not be able to perform as expected in their workplaces. A number of jobs need the employee to be competent both physically and mentally. For example, jobs of defense officers, air traffic control or expensive projects in extreme environment. In such important occupations, an old person can not be expected to be the in-charge even though he or she is highly experienced. Furthermore, such incapable occupants might resulting in life threatening disasters not only to him/her but also to others. So it is crucial to consider the type of job before providing extension.

To sum up, though increasing age limit for retirement can be proven to be positive in several circumstances, it can also horrible if the competency based on the nature of the job is not considered. So the extension should not be provided only based on the increase of the life expectancy. Because for some people it is still be safe to live on pension and not being proven incapable.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, apart from, for example, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81891891892 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76731549739 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559459459459 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1487700195 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.9047619048 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.619047619 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61904761905 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274173291416 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795370416355 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657709684303 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164333322447 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551642463854 0.056905535591 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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