Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level.
Do you agree or disagree?
today, In this competitive world, pupils have a lot of pressure of education on their mind so I firmly agree with the writer's notion that the school have to teach music, art and drama subject with their regular discipline at the time of elementary school. Reasons for my inclination glance through the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, in the world of stiff competition student fill a lot of pressure to become a first in among their peer group hence they do not give proper attention to other subjects which gives them refreshment and remove the stress of other subjects. In addition to this, subjects improve the creativity of the pupils and which result improve their concentration toward other subjects as well. To cite an example, student who has good command on music they can create their own band which laid them to learn team leading and ownership capability.
Moreover, a student who has good command on art they can express their feeling by their painting and in future, they can choose art as their profession and they can earn huge amount of money, also get the satisfaction of work as well. For example, the Indian send artist famous for his send art around the globe and earn a healthy amount of money from their creativity he was an undergraduate person but because of his creativity, he got fame. Secondly, nowadays there are many companies how hair creative developer and offer them a 6 digit salary to show their creative and increase the revenue of the company, perfect example of this is the creative director of Adobe world's leading software company, Mr Robert get 2 million dollars in term of salary and other benefits per annum.
In conclusion, the disciple has to spend some time on other subjects than the main subject by which they get rejuvenate and improve their concentration which helps them in other subjects as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85849056604 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52288485363 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559748427673 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.2975951904 172% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.1816256242 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.666666667 106.682146367 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.3333333333 20.7667163134 170% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.2222222222 7.06120827912 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120797260702 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497541291652 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464377641647 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828341170782 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03792696572 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 13.0946893788 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.1190380762 158% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.