Some say that secondary school should spend less time on traditional subjects such as history and should spend more time on communication skill and business courses. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it ?
Students at secondary level of school are taught subjects like history and are given more time to spend on these subjects rather than communication skill and business subjects. I disagree to the fact that such subjects should be given less importance to that of communication skill and business subjects, and a number of reasons surround my opinion.
Students at secondary level of study do not have the ability to judge what they want to become when they grow up, and thus it is important for them to build a foundation by studying traditional courses such as history. They should get to know the background and culture of the country from where they belong. It is important for the schools to equip them with knowledge and educate them with the background of the country and of the world at large, by teaching history. For example, historical achievements of stalwarts such as Mahatma Gandhi and Martin Luther King can be known by studying the subject, people who paved our way for a better life.
On the other hand, effective communication and business courses although important, can be learnt through real world exposure in their professional lives. They may need classroom training to learn business courses, but to gain business acumen and thrive in it, they need real world exposure which cannot be achieved during secondary school. For example, someone can have inherent communication skills, and thus do not need to be taught.
In my opinion, although effective communication and business courses are more relevant in today’s world, subjects such as history should be given more importance as they will create the foundation of the students and thus should never be ignored.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'learning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: learning
...lives. They may need classroom training to learn business courses, but to gain business ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, so, thus, for example, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09677419355 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72015856144 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519713261649 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.5490064341 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.2 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292335865982 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116281810103 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931484269895 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193266775069 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114405687037 0.056905535591 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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