Studies have suggested that nowadays children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time on active or creative things. What are the reasons for this and what measures should be taken to encourage children to spend more time o

It is irrfutable that, nowadays education has more focused about mental capabilites rather than physical abilities . I personally beleive that, both activities are important. Furthermore, I will debate this topic with the help of examples.

At began with, the first and foremost reason is that, in our society and education system is too much complex.They have no idea how to reform children career. They are only focus particular area. They are trying to enhance only mental capability in the form of projects, presentation and homework. Even most of the student used their time in the front of computer and television and collect the data according to their subjects. For instances, according to Pakistan survey reports only 30 percent children have fully growth and 70 percent have some deficiencies in physical manners.

Another reason is that, due to lack of physical activity most of the children are involved in different kind of diseases. Even the attendance ratio of children in school are decreasing day by day. Due to this reason, children are lack competative. Only focus of one particular area is not a right thing. Every human being is required vitamin, calcium and fats etc. Just because of indoor activity it is quite impossible.

I beleive that, school faculty should introduce the new schemes and project in the form of sports, IQ competition and many more. Moreover, government should provide the funds to the organization instead school. Because I beleive that, youngster are the future of the country.

I put in it nutshell, I beleive that, both activities are required same amount of interest. So, parents, school faculty and government should implement the rules and regulation regarding other activities.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, so, for instance, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25899280576 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78093704029 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589928057554 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.926209385 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.9473684211 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6315789474 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68421052632 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196890307864 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512605121252 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386869564144 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923041634074 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434235775818 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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