These days some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or cultural events. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? To what extent do you support this development?
Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated over people spending exorbitant amounts of money on tickets for sporting or cultural events. Some believe that spending on such events has a positive effect while some believe otherwise. Personally I believe that it is a negative development however, there are a few positives in attending these events.
On one hand, sporting events like the Olympics and Cricket World Cup are organised once every 3 or 4 years thus creating excitement among its fans. People who are sports fanatics are ready to pay an unreasonable amount of money to view the matches in person thus generating a huge income for the host countries and boosting their economy. Likewise, the same could be said for concerts and cultural events performed by well-known international artists. Additionally, attending these events acts as a great stress buster and helps people to detach from their problems. For example, a recent empirical research done by Hidustan Times states that 80% people are ready to buy expensive tickets for live concerts and events as they help to relieve stress and uplifts their mood.
On the other hand, the issue of people spending a lot of money on tickets for sports and other events like cultural or concerts has grown in importance over the last few years. The central reason behind this is twofold, firstly, most of the young generation are huge fan of national and international artists and athletes and they would go to any heights to attend their events. Due to this craze, they end up spending their money on purchasing expensive tickets for a onetime event. This money could have been used for more productive purpose like on studies or hobbies. Secondly, there are quite a few negative activities that are reported; like unauthorised distribution of drugs, alcohol and cigarettes to those who attend events like music concerts, sports and cultural events. For example, an extensive study done by Indian Express states that in the year 2018 on an average 20% of people who attend musical concerts and cultural events got addicted to drugs as they are freely available. Therefore, it is conclusively clear that spending money on expensive tickets is not the only problem but there are other negative aspects as well.
From the above arguments and examples given I firmly believe that, spending on any events is a mere waste of money as these events are broadcasted live on television and people can enjoy watching these events with friends and family. Also, such events attracts a lot of other problems as well which requires a quick attention.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2196.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 434.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0599078341 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59809766772 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513824884793 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.6771872792 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.176470588 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5294117647 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237951507073 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883786963371 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644941521561 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162463883403 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0982762998254 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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