The topic "Retirement age" is somehow difficult to justify in today's world. Mostly people starts their professional life right after the completion of their education, however some people had to struggle from their early child hood. Setting of retirement age varies and it mostly depends upon individuals, his or her mindset, physical strength, passion for work and above all the occupation chosen.
Firstly, setting the fixed retirement age for everyone is one way justifiable that all the individuals are considered equal regardless of their occupation. Secondly setting higher leaving age kept ones individual in his or her mind that he has to continue work therefore he or she will keep focus on this health. Finally, the early you retire the more boredom will surround you that will negatively impact your mind and body. Therefore one should work up to his maximum until or unless he has some medical grounds that enable him to perform his work.
On the other hand, there are different fields in which individual chose to pursue their careers, some are tough and requires more physical energy like people working in remote oil field or sailor, who are away from their families for long and spend their most of time alone. They occasionally, say, in a year or twice a year able to meet their families and spend time with them. Such people should qualify for earlier retirement for some of the reasons mentioned above.
I agree with the statement that certain occupations like, the people working in office, or the profession that requires them to sit mostly in one work place, also they have fixed working time and those who work from 9 to 5, return back to their homes daily and spend time with their families should be in age 65 category, on contrary professions that requires stay away from their families having less leisure time should qualify for early retirement to compensate with the ones who enjoys everyday with their families and friends.
The topic "Retirement age" is somehow difficult to justify in today's world. Mostly people starts their professional life right after the completion of their education, however some people had to struggle from their early child hood. Setting of retirement age varies and it mostly depends upon individuals, his or her mindset, physical strength, passion for work and above all the occupation chosen.
Firstly, setting the fixed retirement age for everyone is one way justifiable that all the individuals are considered equal regardless of their occupation. Secondly setting higher leaving age kept ones individual in his or her mind that he has to continue work therefore he or she will keep focus on this health. Finally, the early you retire the more boredom will surround you that will negatively impact your mind and body. Therefore one should work up to his maximum until or unless he has some medical grounds that enable him to perform his work.
On the other hand, there are different fields in which individual chose to pursue their careers, some are tough and requires more physical energy like people working in remote oil field or sailor, who are away from their families for long and spend their most of time alone. They occasionally, say, in a year or twice a year able to meet their families and spend time with them. Such people should qualify for earlier retirement for some of the reasons mentioned above.
I agree with the statement that certain occupations like, the people working in office, or the profession that requires them to sit mostly in one work place, also they have fixed working time and those who work from 9 to 5, return back to their homes daily and spend time with their families should be in age 65 category, on contrary professions that requires stay away from their families having less leisure time should qualify for early retirement to compensate with the ones who enjoys everyday with their families and friends.
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Healthy body has healthy mind
Healthy body has healthy mind, the statement is recognized by many facets, such as doctors, medical scientists and researchers.
Few decades ago, when the electronic inventions and internet were limited and unable to afford my masses, children and teenagers used to have more outdoor activities, such as playing soccer, skating, running etc. The generation of that time had more mental and physical strength, less prone to diseases, have more l interactions with peers. In addition, they have far more leisure time with their parents and families.
As technological development takes place specially with advent of web, smart phones, gaming consoles, more and more kids restricted to stay at home and start spending most of their times on such devices resulting in decrease in physical activities, less focus on studies, and becoming couch potatoes.
As we are progressing, new discoveries are appearing in market to attract these young generations, creating negative impact on children physical engagement, we need to think seriously and come up with the solution to encounter this problem, one such solution is the mandatory introduction of physical education or sports at school level, and make it mandatory for all students to participate in it. This will initiate the shift, though it won’t be fast, but gradually increase the participation. One important point to consider here is constant counselling to kids and children will also play pivotal role in changing their minds.
To conclude, in my opinion it is the most challenging task to mold the children of present era, divert their mind and educate them regarding benefits of physical activities and sports activities on their personalities and next generation to come.
Healthy body has healthy mind
Healthy body has healthy mind, the statement is recognized by many facets, such as doctors, medical scientists and researchers.
Few decades ago, when the electronic inventions and internet were limited and unable to afford my masses, children and teenagers used to have more outdoor activities, such as playing soccer, skating, running etc. The generation of that time had more mental and physical strength, less prone to diseases, have more l interactions with peers. In addition, they have far more leisure time with their parents and families.
As technological development takes place specially with advent of web, smart phones, gaming consoles, more and more kids restricted to stay at home and start spending most of their times on such devices resulting in decrease in physical activities, less focus on studies, and becoming couch potatoes.
As we are progressing, new discoveries are appearing in market to attract these young generations, creating negative impact on children physical engagement, we need to think seriously and come up with the solution to encounter this problem, one such solution is the mandatory introduction of physical education or sports at school level, and make it mandatory for all students to participate in it. This will initiate the shift, though it won’t be fast, but gradually increase the participation. One important point to consider here is constant counselling to kids and children will also play pivotal role in changing their minds.
To conclude, in my opinion it is the most challenging task to mold the children of present era, divert their mind and educate them regarding benefits of physical activities and sports activities on their personalities and next generation to come.
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Suggestion: some
...ould qualify for earlier retirement for some of the reasons mentioned above. I agree wit...
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Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
...ng time and those who work from 9 to 5, return back to their homes daily and spend time wit...
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Line 7, column 313, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'category' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'categories'.
Suggestion: categories
...with their families should be in age 65 category, on contrary professions that requires ...
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Line 7, column 491, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... to compensate with the ones who enjoys everyday with their families and friends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00607902736 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50079762961 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547112462006 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 122.391527282 49.4020404114 248% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 149.727272727 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9090909091 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.18181818182 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426126714608 0.244688304435 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179571536365 0.084324248473 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.191347631099 0.0667982634062 286% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305192670639 0.151304729494 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.265936117162 0.056905535591 467% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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