Write about the following topic: As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers, and discuss at least one problem that may result.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Technological impacts over the society are vast. Initially, people were not used to the fact that their work can be done by a so-called computer. As the advancements progressed, the computers started taking over sectors of work slowly. Nowadays, people depend on computers or mobile phones to carry out their daily chores like paying bills, ordering groceries and also enhancing your work efficiency by storing data, working efficiently and without manual errors.
Computers have definitely eased the way of working. For instance, earlier companies used to hire skilled people for the job of data entry or to maintain records of the company’s developments. The people qualified for the job were diligent to err is human. Hence as the technology progressed; computers were introduced. People were required to learn the system of computers to use it for their betterment at work. Overtime, the expertise required for the same job changed and the people with less skills but good knowledge of computers were hired. Now skilled people were not as much required for the job as the computer did everything accurately for them and even less qualified were perfect for the job.
Due to the pandemic, people have started supporting work from home opportunities which has in return positively affected the use of computers. Although, it has adversely affected the profession of architecture. Architects are required to digitize their creative skills rather than on paper. Due to this the use of bulky software is incorporated for efficient delivery of the work. Hence the architects are now required to be more digitally aware of the numerous software as compared to earlier on. The companies find it expensive to hire compelling candidates being both creative and tech-savvy. Hence companies hire draughtsman instead of architects to get their job done at a lower rate.
All in all, computers have positively flourished some of the sectors but has also negatively impacted some of the professions. Due to which the employment rates are decreasing in such sectors and people are forced to change their profession to a more digitally recognized one.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... the job were diligent to err is human. Hence as the technology progressed; computers...
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Line 3, column 492, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun skills is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...he same job changed and the people with less skills but good knowledge of computers ...
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Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sitively affected the use of computers. Although, it has adversely affected the professi...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ted for efficient delivery of the work. Hence the architects are now required to be m...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...tes being both creative and tech-savvy. Hence companies hire draughtsman instead of a...
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Line 7, column 50, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...l, computers have positively flourished some of the sectors but has also negatively impacte...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ectors but has also negatively impacted some of the professions. Due to which the employmen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1808.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25581395349 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87737838697 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517441860465 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 581.4 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6390665939 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.9 7.06120827912 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192000047693 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636495401099 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412518114784 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111875710706 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460155170136 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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