You should spend 20 minutes on this task During a recent plane journey you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants Write a lett

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You should spend 20 minutes on this task.

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter
 Remind him when and where you met
 Tell him what kind of job you are interested in
 Say why you thin you would be suitable for the job

Write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows :
Dear …….. ,

Dear Roger,

Regarding the discussion we had on the plane about a job opportunity in one of your restaurants. To refresh your memory, we were aboard the flighr 6RTS on 25th October 2021 travelling from vancouver to Ontario. The flight took off at 1800 Hours and touched down at 2000 Hours, during which we met and had a conversation.
Turning to the type of job opportunity, I am particularly interested in the managerial position, although a job in HR department would be fine as well.
Now, About my eperience, I have 5 years of experience as a Branch Manager and 2 years of know-how as an HR. Furthermore, I am a top level graduate with a degree in Hotel Management. I would like to be considered for a managerial position due to my experience as a manager being higher.
Expecting a reply from you soon. If you need any more information don't hesitate to contact me at gaurav.upadhayay@gmail.com .

Thanking You,
Gaurav Upadhyay

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 33, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...gher. Expecting a reply from you soon. If you need any more information dont hesi...
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Line 6, column 66, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... soon. If you need any more information dont hesitate to contact me at gaurav.upadha...
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Line 6, column 123, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...contact me at gaurav.upadhayay@gmail.com . Thanking You, Gaurav Upadhyay
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, regarding, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 780.0 1615.20841683 48% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 162.0 315.596192385 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81481481481 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 4.20363070211 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.43479394975 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 176.041082164 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.685185185185 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 506.74238477 47% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6691743667 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.0 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126332639026 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555438073033 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582193972406 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.062295292823 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562081414743 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.0946893788 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 78.4519038076 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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