During a recent plane journey you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants

Essay topics:

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants.
You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing to express my interest in working at one of your restaurants.

My name is Tina, and I met you on your recent flight from Mumbai to Delhi on December 25th, 2021.

During our conversation, you informed me about the vacany position of a cashier at your Curry road outlet. As I informed you before, I have a hotel management degree and a diploma in accounting. So my education qualification fits perfectly with the job profile. I would be more than happy to work with your esteemed firm.

I assure you that given an opportunity to work with you, I will prove myself to be an asset to your company. I will perform all my duties with dedication and hard work. I am enclosing my resume for your reference. I am available for a formal interview this week, from 09.00 AM to 11.00 AM, Monday through Friday, and after 03.00 PM on Saturday.

If you need any other information, please feel free to call me at 55-55. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
Tina

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 110, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... myself to be an asset to your company. I will perform all my duties with dedicat...
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Line 9, column 170, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...y duties with dedication and hard work. I am enclosing my resume for your referen...
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Line 9, column 215, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...enclosing my resume for your reference. I am available for a formal interview thi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 843.0 1615.20841683 52% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 184.0 315.596192385 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58152173913 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66323757057 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.66847826087 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 252.9 506.74238477 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.2439241654 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.8461538462 106.682146367 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1538461538 20.7667163134 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.923076923077 7.06120827912 13% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135777850912 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511519242726 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496431114697 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0831355746891 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352739817619 0.056905535591 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 13.0946893788 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 50.2224549098 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.69 12.4159519038 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 78.4519038076 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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