Some people believe that it is a good idea that older people continue to work if it is possible for them to do.
Do you agree or disagree?
Many are increasingly of the belief that people should continue working beyond the recommended age of retirement. I concur with this sentiment generally, although others may have some compelling reasons to oppose this.
The benefits accruing from working even after the retirement age are by no means negligible. Firstly, we are enterning a greying society. It has been estimated by end of 2050, a significant percentage of world’s population will comprise of aged people. It will be a waste of human resource, if elderly are not allowed to work. Besides this, they have invaluable experience and expertise which will play an indispensable role in training the younger generations. Secondly, the government can receive taxes from them and save on pension. In other words, when old people are working, they will continue to pay taxes to the government. Tax-payers money can be used to invest in areas requiring improvement. In addition, government will have to pay pension for shorter period of time since old people will retire after extended duration.
However, others put forward convincing arguments against elderly’s employment. The most axiomatic agrument is concerned with the employment opportunities of young people. If old people do not retirement from jobs, there will not be enough vacancies for youngsters. Thus, government will have to take measures to ameliorate the young unemployment rate. Furthermore, old people have already done their part to support society. Now at this vunerable age, they should relax and enjoy the remaining years left. By making old people work will not only add stress and strain to their life but will also make their health deteriorate faster. Therefore, the more old people stay away from workload, the more cheerful their greying life will be.
In conclusion, despite the fact that some people contest the working of old people, in my opinion, it is advantageous if they continue to work. Advantages such as a proper usuage of man-power and an increase in taxes outweight the disadvantages like concern for youth employment as well as health of older people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26627218935 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84407408421 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603550295858 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6691187054 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.7619047619 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0952380952 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.04761904762 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184429480811 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538339921393 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061201222893 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123571366989 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274273352057 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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