Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:Say why you would like to go on the tripSuggest what

Essay topics:

Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head

teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to

go.

Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:

Say why you would like to go on the trip
Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
Ask other questions about the trip

Hello sir,
I am writing to inform you that I would like to go with my child on

school trip as he is not too mature and won't understand rules that he has

to follow.
I have a vacation on my work so I would like to join school trip with

the students. If I am coming then I can arrange food for students as well

as make sure full attention on all students. As I did research about Canada

online and I found some eminent places to visit and do enjoyment there.

During the trip, I entertain all students as I am a comedian.However, if

you need any kind of assistance, I am there to help you.
As I research on web and I have a few question about the trip. my

primary question is how long we have to stay there and do we have travel

insurance with us?. one more last concern about accommodation. is it already

booked house or apartment for all students or after reach there, we have to

find?
I hope you will understand my situation and I will attain positive reply from your side.

Faithfully
Kishan Patel

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

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...ur side. Faithfully Kishan Patel
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, then, well, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 865.0 1615.20841683 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 194.0 315.596192385 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4587628866 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 4.20363070211 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56386695302 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 176.041082164 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59793814433 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 506.74238477 52% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8401765737 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6363636364 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6363636364 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.27272727273 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 13.0 4.38176352705 297% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 29.0 5.01903807615 578% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168935559998 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544634401527 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732994580084 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0595611852121 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.092394062289 0.056905535591 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.0946893788 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 12.4159519038 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 78.4519038076 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.