1- Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does
That in today’s world, people’s lives are affected by assorted factors is an axiom. Both internal factors like family relationships and external ones like job environment influence people’s feelings. A question, which is a matter of debate, a controversial one, is whether job affects our happiness more than social life. Although, it is a little hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I am, to a great extent on the belief that people’s job have a more profound effect on their happiness. The following reasons would elaborate on the thesis.
To commence, one of the compelling reasons that justifies the thesis is that people expend at least eight hours a day, which is on third of their life, at the work place. To put it in general words, only when people are intrigued by their job originating from their intense like, can they be happy and joyful. Simply stated, meeting and interacting with so many other employees at the word place, people are affected by their positive or adverse feedbacks. Going into the depth, the more people like their job, the more feelings of delight engender. Needless to say that an appropriate job can be deemed a decisive approach through which people experience a healthy lifestyle with abundant pleasure. It is all transparent that having worked for several hours in a joyful environment, people will still have enough energy to interact with family members which bring about more happiness and a sturdy family foundation. To shed more light on the issue, according to the result of the study posted in Time Magazine, employees who do not like their job and work only for scant income usually suffer from depression to some degree.
Alongside with the first reason elaborated above, the importance of the amount of income due to working is another point which requires meticulous attention. To clarify, unless the extravagant cost of subsistence cannot be fulfilled, no feeling of happiness can be experienced. Broadly speaking, since the cost of sustenance is increasing at an unprecedented rate, if the initial needs of people cannot be obviated by their income, they will not be happy at all. To delineate, tired of working in several shifts without plentiful salary, people will be under the pressure of financial burden and lots of stress. To elucidate on, to recreate and disport for having some excitement, a great deal of money should be spent in recreational facilities which are only affordable for people with high salary. However, what I mentioned above might not be overgeneralized to all contexts. Some people who receive huge amount of money each year never feel happy in their life because of so many problems in their social life. Nevertheless, they are more of an exception rather than a general rule.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that the job of people have a more intense effect on their feelings and happiness. To recapitulate the reasons, not only do people spend the majority of their time at job with other people, but also the amount of income also play a significant role in people’s sentimentalities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, third, at least, broadly speaking, in general, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2648.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 529.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0056710775 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7638473298 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514177693762 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 840.6 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2625680936 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.363636364 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0454545455 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128200588466 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472262395012 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547324068312 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0961536089135 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370761133182 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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