131 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Only people who earn a lot of money are successful Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

The paramount goal of everyone is to be successful in his life. Success is a kind of achievement in which someone is infused by a sense of satisfaction. Perhaps money is the most important factor in it. There are a lot of debate among people about that whether earning a lot of money means success. As far as I’m concerned, I believe that money is the very proper indicator for being successful for some reasons that I list in following paragraph.

First of all, proficient people who have a lot of abilities and skills in their field can earn enormous money because of their knowledge and this shows that they are prosperous in their life. When someone becomes master in his field, he can offer prefect value, service, or product that a lot of people will to pay a good money to gain that. For example, a skillful mechanic who can pin point and fix the problem expeditiously take more money for his services and has abundant customers. As a result, he earns plenty of money and he is considered as a successful man in his guild.

Secondly, people can consider themselves as a successful human, when they have ability to fulfill their desire. Many desire need a lot of money to become reality so if they earn excessive money, they can be successful. For example, when someone helping poor people, he become satisfied from himself so he think that he’s prosperous in his life. In this condition, if he built some places to shelter them, he will assume himself as a prosperous man and he will think that he is successful. He can only accomplish this dream, if he can earn a lot of money.

In conclusion, there are many convincing reasons that show that earning abundance of money means success. A proficient person earn plenty of money based on his knowledge that shows that he is prosperous in his life. Furthermore, someone can be successful when he has ability to do what he wants and the money is the only thing that gives him this advantages. Thus, people must earn a lot on money to consider themselves as successful men or women.

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Average: 9 (4 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'good money'.
Suggestion: good money
...roduct that a lot of people will to pay a good money to gain that. For example, a skillful m...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 246, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'helps'.
Suggestion: helps
...e successful. For example, when someone helping poor people, he become satisfied from h...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 306, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
... he become satisfied from himself so he think that he's prosperous in his life. ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64835164835 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65021479308 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453296703297 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8053723812 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174846337168 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734207966667 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530643301404 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130229499995 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256861757739 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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