177- A friend of yours has received some money and plans to use all of it either to go on vacation or to buy a car
Your friend has asked you for advice. Compare your friend’s two choices and explain which one you think your friend should choose.
Money represents the only way people can purchase the necessary things to have a normal live. During the last century, the world has confronted with some major economic crisis, and those who did not have savings went through very difficult times. A friend of mine received an amount of money and he has to decide between going on a holiday or buying a car. I think the latter option is better, due to the fact that a car represents an investment and because it is useful. I will explain my choice in detail, in the following essay.
First and foremost, a vehicle equals to an investment on long term. When an individual buys a car, money are not lost because the car can be sold later. While, going to a holiday means spending all the money. Therefore, if unpleasant events take place or if he just needs some extra money, selling the car is a savior option. Otherwise, he should borrow money from a bank which means going in debts for a certain period and paying interest rate. My brother's experience is a compelling example. My nephew got ill and my brother did not have enough money for his treatment. He went to a bank to see how much money can borrow, but he changed his mind when he realized how big the interest rate was. He had to pay triple the amount he was given. Then he decided to sell the car he bought a car a few years ago, and he used the revenue to treat my nephew. Thus, buying a car is financial advantageous on long term.
To continue with, an automobile is very useful because it can be used daily. It can be used for going to work, to trips, for taking the children to school or going out any time an individual wishes without being constrained by the schedule of public transportation means. Moreover, the monthly money spend on gas, adding the comfort and the personal space, are more or less the same with the amount someone spends on common transportation. For instance, when I go to visit my parents I pay around 50 dollars for train, buses and taxi. Not to mention that I have to carry my luggage and that I have to share the space with unknown people. Besides this a lot of time is wasted. A car trip costs me the same, and I do not have to face the other disadvantages. Furthermore, when I come back from my parents, I can take a lot of food supply. So, having a car is very helpful.
To summarize, my friend should definitely buy a car instead going on a holiday. This is because a physical good can be valued sometime in the future, in case of shortage of money. A vehicle is also beneficial, because it can be used to day to day activities, saving time and money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 154, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lost because the car can be sold later. While, going to a holiday means spending all ...
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Line 7, column 234, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'to day'.
Suggestion: to day
...also beneficial, because it can be used to day to day activities, saving time and money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, while, as to, for instance, i think, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36419753086 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49071588098 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520576131687 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3984850452 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.75 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3571428571 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128134973237 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383204498996 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487954925122 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0928520175062 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290452836736 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.71 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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