Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life. Which do you think is preferable? Use specific examples to support your preferable
Learning is a process that takes time and patience. Some consider that it is better to listen to the advice of family and friends, others believe that personal experiences are the most efficient ways for self-development. As far as I am concerned I agree with the latter statement. I will explain my statement in the following essay.
First and foremost, personal experiences are well-rooted in a person's memory. These are facts that an individual cannot forget, especially when they provide negative results. Moreover, people have the chance to evaluate, to analyze and to decide what is the valuable know-how of those situations. Whereas, if a member of a family wants to give a piece of advice about life, an individual tends not to believe or take it serious. This is because family is seldom overprotective and their advice seem to be the subjective, even though they might be right in the end. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Back in high school I used to have a very good friend, to whom I was sharing personal details. My mother warned me not to be very open about my feelings and beliefs, because one day I might be disappointed by my friend. My mom also believed that my friend was envy on me, but I did not give too much importance to this. A few years after, I found that "my best friend" was spreading fake stories about me, based on what I used to tell her, but she distorted my version. Thus, from my experience I learned not to trust people that much ever again.
To continue with, the society is in a continuing process of development, of changing and these can be noticed only when a person have direct contact with diverse situations. As a result, some realities that were applicable in the past, are not suitable for the present. For instance, my mother has always repeated to me that the only path to reach success is by going to the University. When she was young, the students who were attending college were granted with a good job. Moreover, the profile they studied in college was not very important. Unfortunately, today's realities are far away from being the same. Students have to do much more work for being successful: they must do inter-ships, volunteering work and learn more then three foreign languages in order to differentiate themselves from others. So, sometimes others experiences do not apply to realities anymore.
To summarize, the best way of learning is by personal experience. This is because personal livings are stuck in our memory and because sometimes family's advice is not proper for modern times.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...st efficient ways for self-development. As far as I am concerned I agree with the ...
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Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...rsonal experiences are well-rooted in a persons memory. These are facts that an individ...
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Line 5, column 730, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ships, volunteering work and learn more then three foreign languages in order to dif...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, whereas, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82471910112 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80761314631 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530337078652 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3395587482 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.88 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228661594176 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615641413746 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863820362281 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154804561347 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695214190642 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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