Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life. Which do you think is preferable? Use specific examples to support your preference.
Learning about life is considered to be a challenging task among people. While some people prefer to learn about life by experience the life challenge, I hold the opposite view. I think the best way people learn about life is by asking family and friends because it is easier way to learn about life, and it does not take time.
To begin with, asking for advice from family members or friends is an easy way to learn about life. It just requires you to set a meeting with them and ask for life details. For example, I remember when I graduated from high school, I struggled about what university I had to apply in and what major I had to choose. Therefore, I set up a meeting with my cousin Khaled who had the same issue before when he was at university, but he was able to overcome it by asking his father at that time. At first, he told me to determine my strengths and weaknesses, then, write them down in notebook. After that, by comparing them, I noticed that I like chemistry, so I had to choose something that is related to this subject. As a result, I chose a pharmacy major which I continue my whole career in. Obviously, I was able to succeed in my life by getting a job in Phiser Company which is one of the big drug company in the world. In addition to that, this meeting with Khaled did not take much time; it took only two hours and after that I learned what I had to do immediately.
On the other hand, learning through the experience is very difficult. Sometimes people must take risk and sacrify their life in order to learn. Back to the first example, If I decided to take risk and choose a major without asking my cousin, I would encounter difficulties at university such as study struggles and I might graduate late from university by choosing the wrong major. However, I would learn by experience this situation which would waste my time and my energy too.
In conclusion, I believe the best way that help people to learn about life is by taking advice from family members or friends. This is because it is an easy way of learning, and it does not waste people’s time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
...d it does not waste people's time.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, while, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39845758355 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48048935355 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488431876607 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5931078874 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0555555556 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6111111111 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.72222222222 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361195945573 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131628948873 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154901683891 0.0737576698707 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284953833879 0.150856017488 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.173749010082 0.0645574589148 269% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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