Today’s parents have a significant role in the decisions of children. Some parents think it is correct that their children make mistakes in life, while other parents don’t prefer their children to make mistakes. In my view, this claim has two sides, I agree and disagree with making mistakes by children. I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, I agree with this claim, not only mistakes are excelling way to learn, but also mistakes make people perfect. People have the right to make mistakes, especially, younger people due to their low experience and information. Younger people need to make mistakes to gain experience in a variety of conditions due to finding courage in facing problems and taking crises decision what a correct decision or incorrect decision. Children make more mistakes because they do not think before making a decision, they are so impatient and inexperienced and some of the children are obstinate and stubborn, they do whatever they want without thinking for the result.
Moreover, I disagree with this claim, it is correct that making mistakes make perfects but some mistakes have an irrecoverable effect on children’s spiritual and morale even it will have a destructive effect on their lives. Children are not mature, if they are in a bad situation or they be in a bad environment or foul friends, they will learn of their behavior since this makes their character and behavior. Furthermore, parents should control their children. Unfortunately, today’s parents because of their work engagement and personal conflict don’t pay attention to their children, so this causes to children become pervert by the condition of society and people. My example will clear my speech. I had a friend, a beautiful girl who was so kind and simple; She always spoke about their inattention of their parents to her. Her parents had own business and they always were on travel or in office. Her parents did not have time to spend with her and allow her to do everything she wants, so this causes she finds bad friends and always be in cafes. After one year I saw her that she got an addiction to alcohol and opium, also she leaves her family and home, and her mom gets deeply depression. Therefore, the inattention of parents and allowing children to do everything will be destructive for both parents and children.
In conclusion, although I agree that making mistakes makes people perfects but it will be dependable on the attention and limitation of parents in the level of mistakes which should not be irrecoverable.
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... are so impatient and inexperienced and some of the children are obstinate and stubborn, th...
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Suggestion: were always
.... Her parents had own business and they always were on travel or in office. Her parents did...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...kes which should not be irrecoverable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2172.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0511627907 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81520633267 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46511627907 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9744508504 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.315789474 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6315789474 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0707537370113 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0280962799799 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0250420571754 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0455284749966 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0152582122374 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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