There are several changes I would like to make in my hometown to make it more alluring to people of my age,building a community centre and a fancy restaurant are two of them.I feel this way for many reasons which I will explore in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, technology has extended into every facet of human lives with it's galloping rate.Over exploitation of technology has increased their interaction with virtual world which leads them to loneliness and hopelessness.To encounter this problem, an insightful and deep communication with real world is indispensable.A community centre in our locality would inevitably helps us to overcome such adversity.A community centre would be able to entice many people by providing social interaction through participation in variegated activities. On the other hand, it would be salutary for their physical fitness and take them out from the scourge of loneliness.
Secondly,people of my age like to do experiments when it comes to travel or food.young people love to indulge themselves in various delectable foods as they are flexible and open minded. Therefore,opening up a new restaurant would ineluctably be able to meet their needs.If this restaurant serves non-indigenous foods like continental,European,young people would be love to visit that place again and again.My own experience is a good example of this.Recently, I visited my uncle's place which is in a different town. My cousin took me to a restaurant there which made Thai food.I really found this cuisine scrumptious and planned to visit it again.That was a new restaurant in that area but within a few times it was able to attract so many young customers like us. This example solidifies the dominance of my standpoint.
In conclusion,according to the reasons I mentioned above,I am convinced that a community centre and a fancy restaurant would be more attracting to them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26973684211 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.49472792485 2.67179642975 131% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 20.1344086022 189% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 141.701931885 48.9658058833 289% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 200.25 100.406767564 199% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.0 20.6045352989 184% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.875 5.45110844103 255% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118709443731 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610169378076 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514324117027 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913331472591 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547140899396 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.4 11.7677419355 190% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.45 58.1214874552 42% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.3 10.1575268817 190% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.0 10.002688172 320% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.0537634409 171% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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