A/D : The most important investment that can be made to the education of children aged four to seven is giving them a computer.
The computer is a great invention in the 21st world. Some people think the computer is the best investment for children of education, such others believe that the computer will hurt children if parents let them use the electric device too early. In my perspectives, I support that the computer is not a good way to educate children aged four to seven. I will explore the reasons in the following essay.
First of all, although the computer is mentally stimulating, children need to get moving. Physical activity is the key to children growth. According to some researches, children well enough exercise will greater the rate of muscle in their bodies and stronger density of the structure Of the born than those who have not enough activities children. This two key points will profoundly affect children's tall and healthy. Thus, there is why let children sit in front of computers is not the right decision.
Second, watching the computer in a long time will harm children's eyes. Children's eyes are much fragile than we thought and they are easy to get hurt because of the blue light, which emits by the computers. The blue is a specific frequency in the spectrum that will influences our eyes when we receive this light in too much long time. In the beginning, it will decrease the ability of the function of the eyes, and then if we still not notice this effect, it will start causing some diseases. Based on this influence, we least want to see children get sick when they are so young. Therefore, parents should avoid it.
To sum up, there is no doubt that the computer must have some excellent benefit to people. However, I am of the opinion that it is not very suitable for young children, especially when they are growing.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 519, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'we the least'.
Suggestion: we the least
...some diseases. Based on this influence, we least want to see children get sick when they...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, no doubt, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1437.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74257425743 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48777030257 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564356435644 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.4172321979 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5294117647 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8235294118 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135688516103 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461347262222 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602996399567 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0855929418799 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623428945811 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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