Some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens. Others believe that the well-being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.
Nowadays, there is a different view of the issue about whether the success of the society should put before the well-being of its individual citizens or not. Depending on personal experiences and beliefs, we may find that some people hold the opinion that the society should be the first place, while others have an opposite attitude that personal welfare is much important. As far as I concerned, I believe the well-being of individual citizens should put before the success of the country. The following discussion will explore my view.
Indeed, countries which have strong power could protect the citizens and make them have a great living environment and state. For example, like American, it has a powerful army and strong government which are also let people have a smooth life. The citizens do not worry about any threat from other countries or any uneven judgment on their court. Hence, of course, the strength of a country is not only present on the welfare, but the success of a society is also very critical.
On the other hand, sometimes if we put the success in the first place, it might cause some adverse effect, once the country gets really successful. For example, North Korean is a very typify example to this point. North Korean has a powerful ability on their product of weapon, and many other countries next by it are all fear to it in some of the level. However, the superior military does not bring any welfare to their people. In fact, the people in North Korean are the poorest citizen in Asia. When the global economy declines, North Korean’s people do not have much food to eat, even some people need to cook the weed to feed their children.
Both successes on the whole society and individual citizens have their own advantages, and none of them is best if we must put one of them to the first place. Actually, we can take a mixed approach to thrive the entirely the country because none of them can be sacrificed when a country wants to develop much well. The powerful on society can protect the citizens to make them have a much safe place to live. The welfare on individual citizens could support the society to promote. Thus, we cannot lose any.
In conclusion, despite the fact that there are some benefits if the society puts in front of individual citizens, that are still many factors we should consider discreetly. Therefore, we cannot presumptuously believe the statement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ntries next by it are all fear to it in some of the level. However, the superior military d...
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Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: THE_EXACTLY_THE[1]
Message: Duplicated 'the' in the phrase: 'the entirely the'. Did you mean 'entirely the'?
Suggestion: entirely the
... we can take a mixed approach to thrive the entirely the country because none of them can be sac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, even so, for example, in conclusion, in fact, of course, on the whole, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80861244019 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50451847797 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488038277512 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3570889894 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7142857143 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9047619048 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.21951772744 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305104618135 0.243740707755 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850884912875 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879659525231 0.0758088955206 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163715461659 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109103392868 0.0667264976115 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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