The statement contends that playing computer games is a clear waste of time and children should not be allowed to play them. Although, the statement only provides one reasoning for the conclusion, a thorough assessment of the statement does not support the it. Children should not be prohibited from playing computer games, rather should be encouraged.
Computer games provide children with a unique and varied experience that they might not get in real life. For an overall development, a child needs to have such different experiences. For instance, a football computer game like the FIFA series allow the children to participate in football tournaments by making their own teams with players they would like to see in their team. They can manipulate the player's decisions and help in developing a strategy for the team. This not only allows a child to get an experience of managing a football team which is not possible in real life but also helps in developing team building and strategy making habits of the child.
Although, most supporters of the statement argue that one side effect of playing computer games can be addiction which have been seen to inculcate comparitively more destructive habits in children than the good ones. The argument provided is absolutely true, but one can monitor a child's change in habits and prevent them from going in the wrong direction. For example, if a child playing a computer game suddenly displays aggressive traits, then corrective actions can be taken to prevent them from happening again.
In sum, the statement's conclusion that children should not be allowed to play computer games because it is a waste of time is unsubstantiated. A thorough analysis reveals that computer games can sometimes be more constructive than destructive. For a child's overall development, he/she needs to have experiences that are not available in real life so easily. Allowing them to experience such situations help in inculcating some better habits like team building and strategy development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1706.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2012195122 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86436780371 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481707317073 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6685245477 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.733333333 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8666666667 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.456788699337 0.236089414692 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187899848534 0.076458572812 246% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.239584114175 0.0737576698707 325% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335754998434 0.150856017488 223% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.183367808846 0.0645574589148 284% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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