A/D....Education children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games and social networking Web sites.
There is no doubt that technology represented in cell phones, video games and internt is one of the humankind's inovation in the past century. Technology help students to reach their parents faster, alleviate some of the stress accumelate due to excessive study and entich studetns communication skills. However, if technology is overused, it could dramatically effects students learning process. Therefore, I agree that with the present of many destractions like cell phones, online games and social net working, educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past. This essay will discuss the reasons in details.
We can't deny that cell phones have a tangled effect in our life. With the invention of cell phones, people can easily communicate with each others. For example,Students can easily use their cell phones to ask their peers a certain question. However, Given that students carry their cell phones with them at school, they are more likely to use it for non- educational purposes. For example, during class time, students can use their phone to send texts to their friends, access internet or book a ticket for a movie. Thus, this distract the students from the valuable information provided by their teachers during the class time.
In addation to the distraction factor, video games is another distracted factor that significantly lower students educational preformance. Of course, playing video games is essential for the student to refresh their mind. However, design more than one hour per day could have a devastating effects on students grades. For instants, a friend of mine playes online games after school for about four hours per days. As a result, he lacks the power and the energy to work on his homework. Given that he is conteniously negelct his home work, he recieve the lowest score in class. Yey , this is not the only comsequences, now he is required to repeat the class and the subject he had the lower score on them. In another world, playing online games make it more difficult for the students not only to focus on their homeworks, but also to preform well in ther classes.
Finally, even though social network is beneficial for students who works on assignments that required study group because it more convinient, it could be more distracted than any other form of studies. People who are participate in the study group over the internet are more likely to talk about stuff other than their acadenic subjects. For instance, students can discuss the recent news or up-coming campus events instead of their study material and assignments. To put in another way, social media can attract students in discussion aside from the educational purposes.
As a conclusion, we can safely say that even though that technology offers a great benefits not only for the students but also for the humankind as whole, misuse the technology can pose a tremendous risk on students education process.
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one of the humankind's inovation
one of the humankind's innovations
Technology help students
Technology helps students
it could dramatically effects students
it could dramatically affect students
Sentence: With the invention of cell phones, people can easily communicate with each others.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to each and others
Sentence: Given that he is conteniously negelct his home work, he recieve the lowest score in class.
Description: The fragment he recieve the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace recieve with verb, past tense
Sentence: There is no doubt that technology represented in cell phones, video games and internt is one of the humankind's inovation in the past century.
Error: inovation Suggestion: innovation
Error: internt Suggestion: intent
Sentence: Technology help students to reach their parents faster, alleviate some of the stress accumelate due to excessive study and entich studetns communication skills.
Error: entich Suggestion: entice
Error: studetns Suggestion: students
Error: accumelate Suggestion: accumulate
Sentence: Therefore, I agree that with the present of many destractions like cell phones, online games and social net working, educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past.
Error: destractions Suggestion: destructions
Sentence: In addation to the distraction factor, video games is another distracted factor that significantly lower students educational preformance.
Error: addation Suggestion: addition
Error: preformance Suggestion: performance
Sentence: For instants, a friend of mine playes online games after school for about four hours per days.
Error: playes Suggestion: plays
Sentence: Given that he is conteniously negelct his home work, he recieve the lowest score in class.
Error: recieve Suggestion: receive
Error: negelct Suggestion: neglect
Error: conteniously Suggestion: continuously
Sentence: Yey , this is not the only comsequences, now he is required to repeat the class and the subject he had the lower score on them.
Error: comsequences Suggestion: consequences
Sentence: In another world, playing online games make it more difficult for the students not only to focus on their homeworks, but also to preform well in ther classes.
Error: ther Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Finally, even though social network is beneficial for students who works on assignments that required study group because it more convinient, it could be more distracted than any other form of studies.
Error: convinient Suggestion: convenient
Sentence: People who are participate in the study group over the internet are more likely to talk about stuff other than their acadenic subjects.
Error: acadenic Suggestion: academic
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 487 350
No. of Characters: 2396 1500
No. of Different Words: 253 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.698 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.92 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.535 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.292 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.402 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.282 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.489 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...o reach their parents faster, alleviate some of the stress accumelate due to excessive stud...
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Line 1, column 329, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cation skills. However, if technology is overused, it could dramatically effects ...
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Line 1, column 363, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'effect'
Suggestion: effect
...ogy is overused, it could dramatically effects students learning process. Therefore, I...
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Line 1, column 389, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
... dramatically effects students learning process. Therefore, I agree that with the prese...
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Line 3, column 4, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...l discuss the reasons in details. We cant deny that cell phones have a tangled ef...
^^^^
Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Students
...ommunicate with each others. For example,Students can easily use their cell phones to ask...
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Line 5, column 580, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e recieve the lowest score in class. Yey , this is not the only comsequences, now ...
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Line 7, column 210, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... than any other form of studies. People who are participate in the study group over the...
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Line 7, column 218, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'participated'.
Suggestion: participated
...y other form of studies. People who are participate in the study group over the internet ar...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 186, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...as whole, misuse the technology can pose a tremendous risk on students education ...
^^
Line 9, column 209, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...chnology can pose a tremendous risk on students education process.
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 237, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ous risk on students education process.
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'no doubt', 'of course', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.285977859779 0.229887763892 124% => OK
Verbs: 0.114391143911 0.158761421928 72% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0793357933579 0.0866891130778 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0571955719557 0.046263068375 124% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0571955719557 0.0685040099705 83% => OK
Prepositions: 0.130996309963 0.118717715034 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0184501845018 0.0351676179071 52% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66916283853 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0258302583026 0.0309702414327 83% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0922509225092 0.0887237588012 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.020295202952 0.0209618222197 97% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00738007380074 0.0139019557991 53% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2955.0 2387.08602151 124% => OK
No of words: 487.0 408.028673835 119% => OK
Chars per words: 6.06776180698 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.35523613963 0.338922669872 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.268993839836 0.251872472559 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.195071868583 0.174417080927 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110882956879 0.112833075102 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66916283853 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519507186858 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 61.5185167372 59.2087087015 104% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.2916666667 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6458090294 48.84282405 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.125 120.699889404 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2916666667 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.583333333333 0.644075263715 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.54480286738 216% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 47.1910506502 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.90322580645 1.45489161554 131% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294839152957 0.300154397459 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.123045808945 0.103427244359 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0885458975572 0.0752933317313 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.483623323259 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.164391750039 0.151897553556 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100537261302 0.114077575197 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803624412071 0.0781384742642 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.274592456851 0.336927656856 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0459439647818 0.067059652881 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178950452641 0.210909579961 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090253099321 0.0618886996521 146% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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