Advertisements for children should not be allowed.
Advertisements, as we all know, are a big part of the human community commercial sector. Due to the paramount importance of advertisements on families, especially children, efforts for elevating their effectiveness have always been among the top priorities of experts. In this regard, many believe that television commercials should not be allowed for children. Likewise, I believe that the negative effects of advertisements on kids outweigh its positive ones. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
The first reason that makes me hold the belief that commercial can adversely affect children is related to the visual effects that can be inductive. Undoubtedly, one of the fascinating parts of T.V programs is the commercials. They attract individuals very easily. They are colorful and full of cartoon characters. When a product is promoted by one of the favorable characters of children, they feel they want it. Take my personal experience as an example. One of the cousins' of mine is a five years old girl. When she sees an advertisement about a toy that the Sponge's Bob introduces, she wants it and even cries for buying it. Because she thinks the toy is Sponge's Bob's toy. Thus, the use of either visual effects or cartoon characters can induce every kid to ask their parents for buying a product. Children rely on the beautiful scenes they see in a T.V commercial and want to have one as soon as possible. In fact, these scenes compel and lead kids to the businesses' purpose.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is commercial mental effects on children that can cause negative consequences in their adulthood. Without a doubt, a T.V commercial through different methods can persuade kids about having a product. But, the process of persuasion can be unfavorable, especially in adult ages. Children perceive that even the characters in the advertisement love them- like their parents- because they do not have any conception about words such as abuse. They consider everybody as friends, even commercial promoters. As a result, they trust. What would happen if they understand they trusted was inappropriate? What is the negative result of trust for them? Needless to say, the adverse feeling they bear make them uncertain about everybody in their future. This usage of children confidant can plant the seeds of distrust. This feeling is so annoying and can lead to loneliness in the future. Although many critics may challenge this debate and discuss that advertisements neither do adverse nor harmful, an increasing number of experts who complain about their negative effect show otherwise.
To summarize, contemplating all remarks, we can safely conclude that television advertisements cannot only induce children about a product but also abuse their feelings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, likewise, may, so, thus, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21538461538 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96119409199 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551648351648 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.770327475 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.1 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1666666667 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.53333333333 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240534081844 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546649437443 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887973105593 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165880672745 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0937700828742 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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