Advertising is the only main cause of unhealthy eating habits.
Healthy eating habits is the most of concerning issue in modern society. Some people argue that advertising is the only main cause of unhealthy eating habits. However, from my perspective, advertising is the one cause of unhealthy eating habits but not the only main one that cause of unhealthy eating habits. Admittedly, unhealthy eating habits partially are caused by advertising, which always tells people how delicious the junk food is instead of how the junk food takes away people’s fitness.
Whereas, sometimes it can be caused by heavy mental pressure also. Today more and more people are facing to heavy pressure from their work and life. It can bring a big problem, unhealthy eating habits. For instance, a latest study from the Nature, the world’s leading multidisciplinary science journal which first published in 1869, shows that when people are surrounded by pressure their appetite may be in a state of disorder. In the other words, when people work under enormous stress their appetite will increase or decrease and then leaving the natural level. Eating too much or less can lead to someone overweight or undernutrition. In shortly, unhealthy eating habits is not only main caused by advertising but also by heavy pressure.
Secondly, unhealthy eating habits might be attributed to busy work, which means people cannot have a meal on time. For example, like surgeons. When they start a surgery operation, they do not know how long operation will be take. Their working time and breaking time are irregular, obviously their eating time irregular too. It is a terrible habit for our body and it may lead to a series of stomach disease even cancer. Don’t surgeons know that bad habit will be a killer who kills their healthy body slowly? No, they are clear, but sometimes they do not have a better choice. In fact, advertising is not the only main coursed of unhealthy dietary habits, working too busy can also coursed of it.
In conclusion, advertising is the one cause of unhealthy eating habits but not the only main one. As well as heavy stress and busy work are bringing about unhealthy eating habits either.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in short, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01960784314 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63354188206 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484593837535 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.8966058341 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3333333333 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.85842293907 389% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.46446358227 0.236089414692 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172135379337 0.076458572812 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.229995503023 0.0737576698707 312% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.352511868535 0.150856017488 234% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.161114825852 0.0645574589148 250% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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