agree or disagree? one of the best way parents can help their teenage children to prepare fot their adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job
The important role of the parents in their children's future life is so considerable and they all attend to train their kids in a way to be effective in their adulthood. Regarding to this fact, some believe that encouraging the youngsters by their parents to work part-time while studying, is so beneficial to them. I agree with this belief and think that being responsible and independent that are two vital aspects of a adult's personality, is received just by working in their teenage time.
To begin with, It is essential for the kids to learn to be responsible since their childhood in different ways and choosing an appropriate career by teenagers can be so helpful in this process of learning because by start working, they face different problems and trying to solve them successfully, causes teens to be responsible and prepare them for their future life that is more complicated than their childhood. For example, my father has this experience, so, in comparison with my uncle who prefered not to work in his leisure time in the past, he can manage his life perfectly.
Secondly, as the teenagers start working part-time, they gain the ability of making money individually and will be aware of the difficulties of earning money and try to save it instead of spending it on unimportant things, so, they do not need to ask their parents for money and will be independent gradually. For instance, I have been working in my grandfather's store since I was in high school and I can say confidently that whenever my parents offered me money, I did not accept it because I thought that I was big enough to earn money by myself and tried to buy my own needs or even help my parents in essential payments like money that had to be paid for water consumption.
In conclusion, it is obvious that children need their parents' pieces of advice to be prepared themselves for challenges they face in their adulthood and the opinion of offering them to take part-time job is a effective way of teaching them to get suitable charactristics like responsibility and independence that are so practical in dealing with the adult life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78474114441 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87207420205 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523160762943 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 45.0 20.1344086022 223% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.743373282 48.9658058833 212% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 219.5 100.406767564 219% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.875 20.6045352989 223% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.375 5.45110844103 227% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341365056578 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173380977099 0.076458572812 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925450950987 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243997477293 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104912607239 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.0 11.7677419355 204% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 58.1214874552 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 10.1575268817 194% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.0 10.0537634409 199% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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