Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days most both parents hove to work to afford facilities for their children to live in better conditions, so they do not have much time to spend with their children, some people believe that parents in their leisure time have to do entertainments with their children, some others think that doing more serious activities with children in parents' spare time is more useful for the children. in my opinion both of them are necessary.
first, children need to play with their parents to feel more comfortable with them and by this way they are going to be more friendly and both parents and children can enjoy their time and these families are more successful than families that the parents do not have time to play with children, for instance, in my family I and my sister can not spend time with my parents doing sports or playing games and always we think that our parents are so strict and we can not tell them about our problems.
secondly, doing activities which relate to children's school is so significant because although schools are more care about the students and the things they do, the children have to be controlled by their parents to see how they do well at school, also most times children have problems in their courses which they have learned at school and they need to ask their problems from their parents. for example, mathematic problems are so hard for most students to solve and when their parents explain them for their children it could be easier for them to do their home works.
In conclusion, parents dealing with problems of providing good life for their children leads to decreasing their leisure time to spend with their children and in my opinion they have to manage their time to do different things like playing and having fun with their children also set time to help their children to do their home work and I think both of these activities are so important to have appropriate life despite having less free time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70348837209 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3160104653 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.406976744186 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 472.5 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6003584229 29% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 57.0 20.1344086022 283% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 161.415612628 48.9658058833 330% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 269.666666667 100.406767564 269% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 57.3333333333 20.6045352989 278% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.1666666667 5.45110844103 333% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.445026224086 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.238808361881 0.076458572812 312% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157072298156 0.0737576698707 213% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328522383616 0.150856017488 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0869122709383 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.4 11.7677419355 250% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 58.1214874552 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.2 10.1575268817 228% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.87 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 86.8835125448 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 24.8 10.0537634409 247% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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