agree or disagree that tv advertising should not be allowed for kids between 2-5
In today’s progressive and sophisticated world where we live, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effect of the TV shows and advertising. In this regard, we can notice that some parents allow their children to watch TV shows just to keep them busy and get rid of the noise, while on the extreme end of the rope, other parents prefer to keep their kids away from the bad effect of screens. From my perspective, the opponent claim looks rational and I will elaborate on my point of view in the following article cogently.
The first exquisite point I want to mention is the negative effect of these advertising programs on our kids especially between ages 2-5 because they are still unable to recognize what they want, in another word, they may want anything they see regardless if it is useful or not. To illustrate, I can mention a personal experience to explain this issue. My son is 8 years old. When he was 3 years old, we arrived in the United State. He was a little boy impressed with all the games and attractive toys when he saw it on the TV. Therefore, he began to ask frequently for these toys even if he did not like it. After a while, I noticed that he began to lost his desire with these games because it is a boring game not like what they describe in the show. Thus, we decide not to buy any new games unless it is useful and he can learn something when he uses it.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating this issue is that kids are not allowed to watch TV or using I pad for more than thirty minutes in a day otherwise it may irreversibly hurt their brain cells. I remember an article in one of the famous medical magazines I read it before, says that more than 45% of babies or kids may have autism or ADHD (hyperactivity) from continuous use of electronics in general or watching TV in a specific. Therefore, I allowed my kids to watch TV or use I pad for only one hour in a day, while the rest of the time they can read, play, color, and write. In another word, keep themselves busy away from screens.
Finally, recently we all noticed that in some of the famous and popular video games or tv shows, there is an ugly figure suddenly appeared in the middle of the show and terrify the kids or asked them wired questions. I can remember before a few months ago, a strange character called "momo" began to appear to the kids in the middle of the show and as a result, all families stopped their kids from watching tv for a while until they catch the person who creates it and through him in the jail
To wrap it up, all the after-mentioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that TV shows are bad for kids because it has much loud music and shows that can distract them. In addition to that, it makes the kids more greedy and may hurt their brains permanently. So, keep your children away from screens and let them be busy with a worthy staff which enables them to become good citizens in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in general, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2419.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 552.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.38224637681 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49116204562 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492753623188 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.580090329 48.9658058833 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 127.315789474 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0526315789 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185048374769 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497897982003 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512802083229 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106877950427 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376800536159 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.72 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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