teenager work

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teenager work

No one can deny the significant effect of work in our life, therefore It is critically important that students starting work early during their life journey. personally, I believe that earlier working will return in more benefits to the workers in many aspects. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following article.

To begin with, having a job is the best way to create an independent person who can live under harsh circumstancing with a limited budget. I can use my personal experience to explain that. When I was 16 years old, I had to start a job as a credit required by the school to pass the 12 grade. My mom rejected all the offers which I get at that time because she did not want me to involved with the community while I am still young and teenager. On the other hand, my father believed in me and supported me because he knew that work will leave a positive impression in my future. So, I worked in a library close to my house as a dispenser, and sometimes I do some arranging duties. After 6 months, they began to rely on me in more complicated issues. At that time, I started saving some money for my college which I used when I applied to a university two years later. I learned how to depend on my benefits to buy my needs rather than asking my parents for that.

furthermore, work is one of the optimal ways to sharpen your social skills in communicating and how to deal with others in social life. In addition, it helps in increasing your confidence in yourself. For instance, when I was in high school, I was very shy and had a very limited friend because I did not like to make new relationships with others. But after starting my career in the library and later as a cashier in Walmart, I discovered new aspects in my personality. one of them is that I love joking and spending a good time with my friends. Gradually, I transformed from that little shy lady to a strong and confident woman capable of making serious decisions.

In conclusion, we can wrap it up the point that starting work earlier leads to create a strong person in the future for two reasons. One of them is they will learn how to live with a little amount of money without wasting it and in contrast, they will learn how to spend them wisely. And second, it will help to create a strong confident person able to pass through difficulties of life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, second, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 22.412803532 294% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 30.3222958057 231% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 1373.03311258 141% => OK
No of words: 439.0 270.72406181 162% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.40546697039 5.08290768461 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.04702891845 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60922381969 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 145.348785872 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523917995444 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 419.366225166 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 3.25607064018 522% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7576290704 49.2860985944 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0952380952 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9047619048 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06452816374 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 4.33554083885 277% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103665366723 0.272083759551 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339861774586 0.0996497079465 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558763412452 0.0662205650399 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0801474109489 0.162205337803 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575176562025 0.0443174109184 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.3589403974 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 12.2367328918 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 63.6247240618 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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