Some parents offer their school-age children money for helping with chores around the house.
Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
No one can deny that our kid’s participation in chores is less than us. They became more selfish and depended on their parents. However, is it fair to state that parents offer their children money for their chores around the house? From my point of view, personally, I agree with this statement for significant reasons which I will explore in the following article.
First of all, I believe that parents could encourage their kids to save money through this idea and buy what they want from these savings. I read research in one of the children’s psychological articles states that kids usually valuable their things more when they pay for it. Additionally, they will learn how to spend their money wisely. For instance, my son is nine years old. He helps me in home cleaning and taking care of his young brother. I give him fifty cents for each task he finished, and he saves this money for the end of the month and buys what he wants. I noticed that he takes care of his stuff better than before thebecause he pays for it from his own money. Now, we are planning to make a saving box for his college. So, he can pay for it with no need to take a loan.
What’s more, when kids get compensation for their services, that will motivate them to be more involved in the chores. We all know that children are usually lazy and argue when parents ask them to do work, but when they get paid for achieving this task, they will be more cooperative with their parents. Adam, my nephew, is a compelling example of this. He is fifteen years old who used to refuse to do any tasks for his parents because he feels that he is not directly responsible for these duties. Therefore, his parents began to give him some money to encourage him to be a positive figure in the family and the community as well. After a few months, he became a responsible boy who likes to help others without any rewards. He volunteered in one of the disability centers in the town to help them in transportation and food servicing.
In conclusion, kids should help their parents with chores because this kind of duty will increase their level of responsibility. Therefore parents may try to offer their kids money to encourage them for participation with other family members. However, that money may motivate them to save money and spending it wisely and will create a responsible person who can help the family and the community as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59122401848 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51047440648 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496535796767 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.378585143 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4347826087 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8260869565 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39130434783 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278841625491 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877707689586 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716629519952 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199540214958 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434558091503 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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