agree or disagree?
television had a positive effect on socoety
The invention of television was one of the most exciting inventions; why so, people called the television, “the magic box”. Since the invention of television, people have different opinions about effects of television on their life and on societies. Some people believes, television could have a positive effect and make them aware of the things happening around them, while, others think based on bad effect of television on children, it is not that much good and must be limited. In my view, television could not have a positive effect on society. I would like to elaborate my opinion with following reasons.
First, people waste their time by watching television for a long time. We all have experienced this problem that we started watching a television show, and suddenly found ourselves wasting too much time on television and we could not do our works. In these days, which we have lots of task to do and we need to manage our time in the best way, television can be a real treat for us, because, by taking lots of our time, prohibit us of doing our tasks at the time. Last week, I had a chemistry exam and because I had just one day off, I had to study hard for it; but, the day when I was planned to study, when I came back home, I decided to watch television for just an hour and then start my study. But after three hours, I found myself still watching television and because I wasted some part of my study time, I could not study as much as I needed and failed in the exam. So, that is why I think television wastes our time.
Second, some programs of television are not good at all. If something wants to have a positive effect on the society, it must make people aware or increase their knowledge, but as we all know, most programs we watch them on television are not good and does not teach us anything useful. besides that, every single day, we see some movies which are not good for children and they should not watch them if they are under a certain age; but, no one can prohibit children from watching those bad programs. In this way, not only television cannot have a positive effect on the society, but also it puts a deep and bad influence on children. For instance, one of my neighbors has a ten years old boy, and each time I meet him, he talks about so many bad and dangerous things he has learned from television. I think television has ruined the morality in him and so many other children.
To cut the long story short, I would like to assert that I am disagree with this idea that television had a positive effect on the society. Why so, we cannot trust to most of the news we hear on television and also there is so many bad movies which increase the tense of violence in children or teach them lots of bad words. That is why, I think television did not have a positive effect on societies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun task seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of tasks'.
Suggestion: lots of tasks
...our works. In these days, which we have lots of task to do and we need to manage our time in...
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Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Besides
... and does not teach us anything useful. besides that, every single day, we see some mov...
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Line 7, column 63, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'disagreed'.
Suggestion: disagreed
...short, I would like to assert that I am disagree with this idea that television had a po...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, second, so, still, then, while, for instance, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 523.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43403441683 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42763424172 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437858508604 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.6768403739 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.95 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.15 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252108174896 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102843005321 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890303048193 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187409704896 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703827833864 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.71 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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