Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
All of the students are influenced by different persons, and these persons can play a strong role on all decisions students make. Some students like to obey their teachers and select them as their role model, while others are more influenced by their friends who are exactly like them. in my view, students are more influenced by the people who have the same situations, and among these people friends are the most noticeable. I would like to elaborate on my opinion with the following reasons.
First and foremost, students and their friends are experiencing almost the same situations. When people be in the same conditions as others, they feel a sense of friendship, and it results in getting influenced by them. All people like to have some friends who can truly understand them, and it is possible only if they experience similar conditions. My own life is a compelling example of this point. When I was in high school, I liked all of my teachers, but never got influenced by them. I always felt there is a big gap between us, and it would be the result of our age difference or other similar reasons. On the other hand, I knew some friends who were in the same age as mine, and we have some similarity in our family situations too. As the result, they could have a deep influence on me, and I always liked to treat like them. This personal experience is one of the reasons why I believe students can get influenced by their friends more.
Second, students spend more time with their friends which results in more tendency toward them. The personality of each person is the average of the personality of five people which he spend most of his time with them, and as students spend the biggest part of their time with their friends, the get influenced by them the most. Students spend almost eight hours a day in school with their teachers, but they meet their friends before and after the school too and share more time together. As the result of spending lots of time together, students usually find themselves more attracted to their friends, and try to make themselves more like them. To bring an example I can mention my brother. When he was ten years old, he had a close friend who was living in our neighborhood. They were really close, and liked to spend almost all the days together. My brother liked to wear the same cloths as his friends, and even when they started University, they chose the same major. In my view, the main reasons why my brother chose the same academic major as his friend is due to the deep influence he could has on my brother.
To sum up, as we spend more time with a specific person and feel that we are in same conditions, we like to mimic his style or opinions more and more. Friends are those people who have these characteristics, and based on this point, my conviction is that students are more influenced by their friends rather than their teachers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: All the
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Suggestion: In
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'spends'.
Suggestion: spends
...the personality of five people which he spend most of his time with them, and as stud...
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, so, while, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2384.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58461538462 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47060829057 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.401923076923 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 14.0 1.86738351254 750% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0446191563 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3333333333 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45833333333 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246148696009 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835105284288 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724463175564 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184696149049 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444288043298 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.62 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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