it is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Thanks to social medias especially Twitter and Facebook, there is no news which we do not hear about it just some few minutes after it happens. When we know what is going on around us, it can be really helpful and helps us to think more wisely. Some people think we must be aware of what is going on around us, while others disagree. In my view, knowing about events happening around us in necessary and we must know them, even if we may think they will not have a deep effect on our life and I would like to elaborate my opinion with following reasons.
First and foremost, knowing about events will help us to know more and decide better. When we simply ignore all events happening around us, we will lose this chance to open our eyes wider and decide better and more wisely. Sometimes we may think that a war in a faraway country, the hunger problem in south Africa or the result of an election in a country, may not affect or daily life, but when we rethink about these events and try to predict their consequences, we realize that even those events which may seem irrelevant to us can affect our life deeply. My own experience is a compelling example of this point. Almost three years ago when Donald Trump elected as the president of the united states, my whole life affected by this result and it was the thing which I did not anticipate to have a deep effect. As soon as his election, the value of our currency in Iran, Rial, decreased and my trip to Canada which was in a month cost a lot more for me. As a result, I could not stay in Canada as much as I wanted and I missed the chance of meeting some of the professors which I wanted to work with them as an international project. That is why I believe we must follow all the news and events which happen around us, why so we want it or not, they will affect our life even if at the first sight we assume they will not make a big change in our life.
Second, everything is happening in a circle and will affect our life in near or far future. It is plain as day that karma is real and every change we make in a part of the world, will return to us one day. By paying attention to this point, we can conclude that nothing is irrelevant to us and we cannot guarantee that an event in a faraway country do not affect us. To bring an example, some years ago, Iraq, a country which is next to my country, Iran, just asked us to help them to reduce salty soils in their lands and our scientist could help them by using some high technology techniques and solved a big part of their problem. When I heard this news, I thought it is just a news in the field of agriculture and science and cannot have any effect on my life as student. But we recently realized that farmers in Iraq by having some more fertile soils, cultivated and used water so must which had a deep effect on the amount of underground waters of my country and we faced to a big problem. Some months later, this problem changed into a political problem and caused so much difficulties for my country.
To cut the long story short, all I want to say is that, we cannot be sure that an event will not have any effect on our life and if we just wait a little bit, we will see other aspect of that event and realize how everything can affect us and even change our life. As the result, my conviction is that it is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: some
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
...I heard this news, I thought it is just a news in the field of agriculture and science...
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... into a political problem and caused so much difficulties for my country. To cut ...
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Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...ffect on our life and if we just wait a little bit, we will see other aspect of that event...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, really, second, so, while, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 28.0 9.8082437276 285% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 107.0 43.0788530466 248% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2796.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 665.0 407.700716846 163% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.2045112782 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.07814867018 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21397408992 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.415037593985 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 892.8 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.1824955251 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.142857143 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6666666667 20.6045352989 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38095238095 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320256138927 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122830934685 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.184250974147 0.0737576698707 250% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261877118846 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.160610009534 0.0645574589148 249% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.39 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.67 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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