young people enjoy their lives more than elder
Young people are in the best part of their entire lives which brings lots of amazing experiences for them and let them to enjoy more. By increase in their ages, more diseases appear, and some serious problems show up which make life hard and rub the chance of having a blessed life. In my view, young people for various reasons enjoy their lives more than elder, and I will elaborate on my opinion with the following reasons.
First, youngsters do not take life too serious which results in having a happier life. Young people instead of thinking about difficulties prefer to be drawn in their dreams and their hope for creating a happy, and it helps them to enjoy the life more. On the other hand, older people are usually worried about the future of their children which results in having lot of concerns. Moreover, elder feel more responsibility toward their family and it can make it harder for them to have a happy life as much as the younger generation. My own life experience is a compelling example of this point. Last year, our country, Iran experienced a big economic and financial problem. Consequently, the life for most of the people became harder and harder. At the time when my father was worried about the future of the country, I was just thinking about studying and participating in my piano class. I believed normal people like us could not do anything which improve that situation, and because of that thought we should not be worried. But, my father was responsible for providing good life situations for us, and could not ignore all those financial problems of the country. This was a reason why at the time I had an enjoyable life, he was too worried and could not have happy days.
Second, young people have healthier bodies which allow them to do more excitement activities that result in having more joy in their lives. Almost all the young people spend most of their time outside the house doing some entertaining activities which can bring lots of happiness to their life. On the other hand, older people confront with different disease which may even make it hard for them to move. As a result, they spend most of their time at home, and it can make them really bored. For instance, my brother is a young man and has a enjoyable life. each week he goes for biking with his friend, and they spend some nice time together. It helps them to go to different places and experience some situations which makes their lives fantastic. In contrast, my grandfather cannot walk properly, and it forces him to stay in home almost all days. This health problem has made him really bored and even seeing how young people with healthy body can go out and enjoy even make him more jealous and bored.
To sum up, youngsters have lots of advantages which their lives happy. They do not think too deep about their problems and have a healthy life which let them to do excitement activities which bring joy to their lives. The bottom line is that based on these justifications, my conviction is that young people enjoy their lives more than elder.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 541, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ance, my brother is a young man and has a enjoyable life. each week he goes for b...
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Line 5, column 559, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Each
...s a young man and has a enjoyable life. each week he goes for biking with his friend...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, as to, for instance, in contrast, as a result, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2524.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 542.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65682656827 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36895195998 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442804428044 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 770.4 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.8605504434 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0769230769 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8461538462 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84615384615 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380391336286 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126945739598 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149660439805 0.0737576698707 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.324719331227 0.150856017488 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121752263089 0.0645574589148 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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