Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Traveling is one of the most common ways for having a memorable vacation and learning a lot about the world around us. When we travel, we can learn about different things, help to improve the economic situation of countries and experience different cultures. Some people believe traveling in our country is more beneficial, while others disagree. In my view, people by traveling to foreign countries can benefit more and I would like to elaborate my opinion with following reasons.
First, by traveling to foreign countries we can learn new languages and cultures. We should not travel just for the sake of it, we must travel to different countries to learn more about the world around us and know other people who may be different from us better. When we just travel in our own country, we see people who are akin to us in language, culture and so many other aspects, while by traveling to foreign countries, we can learn that how much people can be different and learn so many good things based to this difference. For instance, last winter I traveled to Canada and experienced a climate which was so different from the climate of my country, Iran, and because my country is somehow warm in all seasons I thought it would be interesting to live in a country which has so cold weather. This trip was so inspiring for me, because I learned that how we can overcome our problems exactly how people in Canada overcame harsh climate situation in their country and did not give up. I also learned so many things about the culture of the people, especially in Montreal, which was really interesting.
Second, traveling to foreign countries leads to experiencing some beneficial difficulties. When we stick in a harsh condition and has no way to escape from it, we can learn so many things from it and it is exactly the thing which happens by traveling to new countries, why we must overcome to lots of cultural shocks and learn from them. Each country has its unique culture and it is one of the things which makes traveling to foreign countries really enjoyable. To bring an example, three years ago when I traveled to the united states, I found that the people in this country really like to exaggerate about everything and it is while the people in my country, Iran, would prefer to be honest about everything. When I was spending my amazing time in the united states, I faced to so many cultural shocks and also because the values of my country's currency is really different from the united state's, I had to learn how to manage my money to not to face financial problems. This trip was really nice and I could learn a lot which was not possible to learn if I wanted to spend my vacation in my own country.
To cut the long story short, based on presented justifications, my conviction is that we can benefit more from traveling to foreign countries and take some good lessons for our life in the future. If we just travel in our country we may help local people of our country to have more income, but we lose this chance to learn about different cultures and languages and we cannot see issues from other aspects, which we usually do not see from there.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 450, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, while, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2600.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 563.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61811722913 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53692946149 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.385435168739 0.524837075471 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 813.6 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.4993502242 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.444444444 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2777777778 20.6045352989 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248709247809 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111881121104 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608153376683 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19421843228 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025059589937 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.11 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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